Monday, 3 July 2017

First reading of story

           18 April.  Since the first draft was written, I Started thinking of ways to develop the story Some more  However I found that the story did not flow very well. Here is my first rendition of my story which I performed to my peers.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hYZrj53nJOs&feature=youtu.be

 They suggested for me to use sound effects, more dynamic tones and expression, and to bring the story to life a bit more by expressing myself through sounds and vocal clarity. The tenses were not accurate, and I found that writing in the first person was harder as there were two characters' point of view. I decided that instead of making alterations I would restart the story. This would mean I could start with a new, fresh draft that I could more easily perform. I will upload this version when it is completed. . However, I found that  I continued to think of new ideas to develop the story.

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